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Post by Akago on Aug 24, 2008 15:18:16 GMT -5
I know age doesn't have much to do with it. I just have a habit of cutting young writers some slack, only because of the war I had with grammar when I was that age. I still wrote better than that, and I had to work my ass off at it. Seeing someone abusing grammar like this is just something that makes me twitch because of how hard I had to work to have some mastery over it. I can only be nice for so long though before I'm ready to rip someone a new one, 10 years old or not.
Mewtwo, Gem, whatever. You started over, I can see. And guess what? IT STILL SUCKS! I said it, it sucks. It sucks badly. I am tired of trying to let you down easy. I reviewed your story, I told you why it was bad. And I take it as a personal insult that you have the damned nerve to make a second account right after I did. If you want to be an author, then get off your lazy ass and act like one. Your putting no effort into your stories. Even if it takes a week, a month, just to write one chapter so be it. If you took this story into your language arts teacher, and asked them to grade it, I guarantee you would get a big fat F. And if you don't believe me, then do it. Put your money where your mouth is. Thats all I have to say on this, and if you can't tell, you've managed to piss me off.
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Post by gemthetailsdollfan on Aug 24, 2008 17:00:07 GMT -5
Grrr! You've now pissed me to ****!
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Post by doctorfinitevus on Aug 24, 2008 17:47:56 GMT -5
I know age doesn't have much to do with it. I just have a habit of cutting young writers some slack, only because of the war I had with grammar when I was that age. I still wrote better than that, and I had to work my ass off at it. Seeing someone abusing grammar like this is just something that makes me twitch because of how hard I had to work to have some mastery over it. I can only be nice for so long though before I'm ready to rip someone a new one, 10 years old or not. Mewtwo, Gem, whatever. You started over, I can see. And guess what? IT STILL SUCKS! I said it, it sucks. It sucks badly. I am tired of trying to let you down easy. I reviewed your story, I told you why it was bad. And I take it as a personal insult that you have the damned nerve to make a second account right after I did. If you want to be an author, then get off your lazy ass and act like one. Your putting no effort into your stories. Even if it takes a week, a month, just to write one chapter so be it. If you took this story into your language arts teacher, and asked them to grade it, I guarantee you would get a big fat F. And if you don't believe me, then do it. Put your money where your mouth is. Thats all I have to say on this, and if you can't tell, you've managed to piss me off. THIS. I also want to point out that, like it was said before, creating extra accounts is pointless and makes you look like an idiot. And if you ARE going to make an extra account, make sure you have the admin's consent to do so. Also, this is one of the worst stories I have ever seen. I'm sorry, but it is. I, and most likely everyone else on here, was able to type a hell of a lot better when we were 10. I was getting A's and B's for my stuff when I was that age. As an experience writer, I need to point on thing out: MAKE SURE THE STORY MAKES SENSE AND READABLE. I've read your story, and I can't read a damned thing you've typed. All it is, is a paragraph of illegible text.
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Post by mewtwo on Aug 24, 2008 18:02:54 GMT -5
...what about MY story?
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Post by doctorfinitevus on Aug 24, 2008 18:08:10 GMT -5
Gem, you revealed that Mewtwo is your back up account. And your second story is just as unreadable as this one!
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Post by gemthetailsdollfan on Aug 24, 2008 18:10:24 GMT -5
I think its good! Some people have nice feelings,too! Unlike SOME people.
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Post by doctorfinitevus on Aug 24, 2008 18:16:07 GMT -5
What you need to learn is that
A) Reviewing your own story isn't funny,
B) People who review things are GOING TO BE HARSH. I don't "Sugarcoat" things either. But when I see an awful story and need to say something about it, I go through with it.
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Post by mewtwo on Aug 24, 2008 20:56:08 GMT -5
Ok,ok,I see...
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